Semarang State University is commonly called as UNNES. It is the fourth most favorite
campus in Indonesia.
It has eight (8) faculties they are The Faculty of Education Science, The Faculty of Language and Arts, The Faculty of Social Science, The Faculty of Mathematics and Natural Science, The Faculty of Economics, and The Faculty of Law. The student’s body of UNNES is approximately 40.000 students it is enrolled in these eight faculties. UNNES is also known as the conservation campus. It means that no motorcycles around campus, so the students must go to the campus by foot or by bicycle. Althought motorcycles are prohibited to entering the areas of UNNES, it provides bus transportation to deliver the students, lecturers, and anyone from one building to another on this campus. In the UNNES campus there is a mini forest which has many kinds of trees, plants, and flowers are breeding. In the biology garden there is a butterfly’s breeding house, many kinds of beautiful butterflies live in it. Because there is no air pollution, many trees which grows on the campus, making UNNES be comfortable conservation campus. Not only students, but also the people who lived around the campus enjoy the environment. Almost every day they do sport activity with friends or with their family in the UNNES.
It has eight (8) faculties they are The Faculty of Education Science, The Faculty of Language and Arts, The Faculty of Social Science, The Faculty of Mathematics and Natural Science, The Faculty of Economics, and The Faculty of Law. The student’s body of UNNES is approximately 40.000 students it is enrolled in these eight faculties. UNNES is also known as the conservation campus. It means that no motorcycles around campus, so the students must go to the campus by foot or by bicycle. Althought motorcycles are prohibited to entering the areas of UNNES, it provides bus transportation to deliver the students, lecturers, and anyone from one building to another on this campus. In the UNNES campus there is a mini forest which has many kinds of trees, plants, and flowers are breeding. In the biology garden there is a butterfly’s breeding house, many kinds of beautiful butterflies live in it. Because there is no air pollution, many trees which grows on the campus, making UNNES be comfortable conservation campus. Not only students, but also the people who lived around the campus enjoy the environment. Almost every day they do sport activity with friends or with their family in the UNNES.
Dear Fitri, I love reading your piece of writing. It is easy to understand the ideas because they are well structured. The data presented are accurate and precise. Nevertheless, there are some points that you need to work on.
BalasHapus- Spelling: you need to always reread your writing carefully to avoid miss-spelling. For example, you write “Althought” in line 6, which should be “Although”
- Punctuation: I understand that the use of proper punctuation is always confusing. It seems that you need to consult to sentences based-writing’s book. For example,(1) in line 7 you use commas after the word “UNNES” which should be use semicolon because if the marked comma is separating two complete but related sentences, replace the comma with a semicolon. (2) You have an extra space between words. For example, In line 10 you have a double space in the sentence “many kinds of beautiful” and in line12 you have a double space in the sentence “Enjoy the environment”. Generally, words in a sentence should have only one space between them.
- Grammatical error: to apply the verb of a sentence must agree with the subject in number and in person. For example, in line 11 you write “many trees which grows on the campus” it should be written as “grow” with no “s” .Overall, your writing is well-thought-out. Good job